(oc are welcomed )new Espada

Kasai eyes widen seeing this stranger in her home she ask violet "who are you and whats this about taking my brother i won't allow it now go! ?"kasai says to her angerly as she steps between her and the ghost of her brother


Kuro sighs and touched kasai shoulder "kasai it's time for me to go i love you but it's my time to move on "the boy says as tears prick kasai eyes

"No please don't leave me first mom and dad now you i don't want to be alone! ?"she says crying as kuro looks to violet and sighs and tells her he can't leave me alone

( Use proper grammar from now on please. No one will reply to a person who writes in run-on sentences. )

Kasai, a normal girl went to a private school, goes home, and did her homework. She was a foreigner. She transfered to become an exchange student. So she was the talk of the school and a center of a lot of gossip. She attended Karakura High School, she soon saw Ichigo Kurosaki. He was wearing some strange black clothing and Kasai shrugs it off and walks on to her home and smiles "Well, Kuro. Where have you been?” She says to the ghost boy. Who smiles and tells her how he plans on passing on soon. She hugs him bye and soon hears a terrible howl.


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(My reply)

Violet began looking around for the source of the Hollow’s howl. She darted to the roof to servy the area. She was well aware of other Shinigami in the area. Taking a deep breath she looked down and saw a boy looking up at her. She hopped down to him and smiled, “Hi little one. Do you know when you passed away?” she held the hilt of her sword in case the Hollow were to appear. “It’s okay, I’m going to take you to a better place, okay?”

Kasai was a normal girl whent to a private school go home and did her home work she was a forein exchange student so she was the talk of the school and a lot of gossip she attended Karakura High School she soon see ichigo Kurosaki he was wearing some strange black clothing and shrugs it off and walks on to her house and smiles "well kuro where have you been she says to the gost boy who smiles and tells her how he plans on passing on soon she hugs him bye and soon hears a terrible howel

(Can we continue this)
Bara soon grows out of Breath as she pants "ok rinmi that's enough "she says as she puts away her Zumpakto and leaves she almost to the room given to but hits the wall and cries she didn't feel love any more she felt hallow inside so she just goes in her room not realize that there was now a hole in the wall next morning she was told to go somewere as she is escorted there by her zumpakto to see many captians she was nervous and felt all thier retsiu as the sprite of her zumpakto retreats as bara retsiu help less the load of the others

Again sorry, don't take this the wrong way, but how you reply lacks in length and story flow. I would suggest start writing a fanfic. it's a good way to write longer and to see how to improve your writing. and maybe later on we can rp again. I know you can do it. I believe in you, Samanthathekami!

Believe it! ~Naruto



.. more like


Hell yeah! ~Naruto

Ok you could have said something

Okay, I been trying to be nice... but I have lost interest. I'm sorry.

She block his attack as best she can soon she stopped training and goes to the room given to her she picks up her Violin she had brought after taking Kuro home and be began to play beautifully

"Before we start Bara, I won't hesitate to harm you if you fail to block." He made his first step to Bara know and walked around her. He began his first slash at her left following with a second strike.

"Ok Bara get ready to block his every attack "Hakucho says going to his blade form 

"Ok I'm ready rinmi "she says getting in a defense stance

Rinmi laughed a little, "Sure why not." He walked to Bara and smiled, " Are you sure, you want to practice with me?" He took out his zanputo and readied into a offenive stance. Sang-sun watched taking over the not taking.

Hakucho then blind folds Bara "ok Bara you are going to fight rinmi blind folded"he blind folds her as
   
"Rinmi come here "Hackucho says to him

Sang-sun and Rinmi began watching her closely as she trained with her Zanputo. "She is getting better. I do worry she doesn't understand that if you have the chance... you know." Rinmi spoke only in concern to how Bara was talking last time.

Tilting her head to the side, "I know, But you have noticed right?"

Nodding, "Yeah, she is quite the weird one. she has a sword sprite instead of a Resurrección." He began taking notes for her training, "Why don't you have some fun?"

Bara was taken to the training room by her Zanputo she finally knew his "so hakucho what are doing to today 


"we are doing meditation "he says "oh and no one knows we are training in here so be prepared for destraction "he stays as Bara and him began to meditate

Soifon glared at Bara, " I suggest you don't speak," she looked at Rimni then around, "I assume he retreated." She looked around again, "I'll be in my quarters. " She kelt down to Bara, "If you run again, I won't be so nice." Speaking softly, but the intent for her words was deadly, " Is that understood." She walked to her quarters and sighed.

Rinmi rubbed his head, "Luck was on our side today." he went back to cleaning some blood as Sang-sun got some food for Bara.

"So your soifon "Bara says as the swan turns in to a man in all black and helps her up 

Bara then bows to the Captain "it is nice to meet you miss "she says

Soifon walked in seeing her squad was cleaning. She didn't want to know, as long as they kept the place clean and working on the squad duties. She did however look at Bara lying on the floor and Sang-sun and Rinmi discussing something. "4th and 5th Seat, Explained what happened. " The short woman crossed her arms and looked down at Bara again.

Rinmi jolt and approached Soifon, "Captain, I was bring Bara to you, but was informed of your mission." He looked at Sang-sun and nodded, "We gave Bara some basic training and examined her skills for you. "

"She is quite good for her skill level, but Grimmjow had taken a member of her family," She took a breath, "We told her if she leaves she will be punished." Taking another breath, "She also took on Grimmjow when i could no longer fight him off."

She lays there and wait then she feels the spiritual pressure of a captain come

Sang-sun held her, "Hee forgot to lick your wounds." He had Bara lay down and open her dress to take a good look at her wound. "He did quite a number on you." Taking out some ointment she spread it and then dressed the wound, "He was holding back." Going off to tell Rinmi about what happened.

"Sometimes they are but it gives us an advantage "she says she dopples over in pain

Sang-sun got up and looked at Bara and Kuro. She covered her moth, "Rinmi, I know.... that..." She had trouble speaking as she looked at Rinmi.

"ahh, just focus on getting this place clean" He went off removing some broken things and sweeping the area.

Sang-sun went over to Bara and sighed, " men are idiots or violent meat heads, don't you agree."

((Going off to play dark souls. be back in 90 min))

Both Bara and kuro Cleand and didn't speak to ecother "why do people think your older than me?"Kuro asks Bara"because kuro your as tall as me "she says as she finally finished cleaning

Rinmi sighed, "first off, We are going to clean. We did a number on this room fighing Grimmjoq" He went off and hande Bara a Kuro mops and buckets and a few free members of the squad began to help clean the area, "Then we will turn you in to soifon"

"So rinmi witch Captin should I turn my self in "she asked

Grimmjow growled, "Yeh... But i'll be back." He glared at bara and closed the portal behind him.

Rinmi placed himself and Bara's brother back in the normal flow of time, "We will need to be more careful." He walked over to help Sang-sun walk over. Her side was bleeding, but wasn't as bad as it looked, "Well, Bara since you came back. I guess you would have to turn yourself in." He tended to Sang-sun wound and motion for Bara to come close. "Of course, the longer your brother stays in this world the more likely he'll lose his ability to act with people in the human world."